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LJ Idol Season 8 - Week 36: Climbing Mount Washington

This is my entry this week for therealljidol. I invite you to read and vote for the many fine entries. This week we are writing about six different topics. This piece addresses the topic "Pinnacle."

Climbing Mount Washington

We hike the mountain path from blaze to blaze,
drawn upward by our eyes as we ascend.
Though parched and sore, we struggle through the haze,
our backpacks heavy as we near the end.

At last, we summit! We climb atop
the pile of rocks beside
the visitor's center, to view
fog-shrouded valley.

An anticlimax, almost, this result.
We cross a crowded lot, and giddy from
thin air, we turn, bemused; descend again.
We hike the mountain path from blaze to blaze.

The Dorsimbra is a poetry form created by Eve Braden, Frieda Dorris and Robert Simonton, is a set form of three stanzas of four lines each. Since the Dorsimbra requires three different sorts of form writing, enjambment can help to achieve fluidity between stanzas, while internal rhymes and near-rhymes can help tie the stanzas together.

Stanza One: Four lines of Shakespearean sonnet (iambic pentameter rhymed abab).

Stanza Two: Four lines of short and snappy free verse.

Stanza Three: Four lines of iambic pentameter blank verse, where the last line repeats the first line of Stanza One.

Thanks to beta reader roin_arwen for giving this a once over!

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