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This is my first entry this week in the mini-season of therealljidol, Exhibit B. Please read the many fine entries. This week we're each writing on two topics; this topic was "Asia in F Minor."



Female ninja against farm and city backgrounds



Stand Alone Complex

In her future diary, she is choir girl
turned day drinker, acquiring
angel hearts to eat, grilled.
Her fine fish hooks bloom beneath
her petal dance, capturing
those crisis heart brawlers,
those bad boys, those soul eaters.
She'll be an action figure, a corpse princess.
They will fear her fury.

Back at the barnyard, he was Sgt. Frog
to her Black Cat. Or was he sun god,
and she a desert punk? Dynasty warriors,
wolf children, they played death billiards.
Feral fierce in their fine and private place.
He plied her with sword art, called her
into the mermaid's forest. With bamboo blade
he excised her childhood. And so, apartment
became folk tale. A kiddy grad,
she fled the fields. Became a city hunter,
seeking a blue exorcist where devils may cry.
Deep down, she's only a ghost in the shell.





After doing a little research on the key of F Minor, I discovered that it's a key associated with both passion and ambiguity, built on the chords of F, G, A♭, B♭, C, D♭, E♭.

Since I will be helping to run Otakon, the convention of Japanese anime and Asian culture, I took my inspiration from the Otakon guest list. I read through the bios of our guests and made a note of any of the phrases or show titles that appealed to me. Then I highlighted only the ones with significant words starting with F, G, A, B, C, D, and E. I created the poem from alternating between those sounds.

The story emerged from my desire to write about a young woman who was at war with herself, because she blamed herself for having opened herself up to someone who hurt her. Unfortunately, I think too many women (and men) can probably relate.




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i_llbedammned
Aug. 6th, 2013 12:32 am (UTC)
I like the various anime references within the poem.
alycewilson
Aug. 6th, 2013 01:14 am (UTC)
Thanks! Anime titles are so evocative, aren't they? I'm sure a lot of my friends will recognize them.
x_disturbed_x
Aug. 7th, 2013 04:42 pm (UTC)
I feel giddy that I could get some of the references in the poem. :D
alycewilson
Aug. 7th, 2013 05:00 pm (UTC)
Glad you got some enjoyment out of it!
tatdatcm
Aug. 8th, 2013 04:06 am (UTC)
I'll admit I was a little lost (I know nothing about Anime), though the sentiment of the poem came through very well. I'm glad you had the explanation at the end.
alycewilson
Aug. 8th, 2013 08:14 pm (UTC)
I'm glad the emotion came through, because that's what was really driving me. To be honest, I don't know a lot of these titles either, except for what the names evoked. Glad the explanation helped.
michikatinski
Aug. 8th, 2013 05:09 pm (UTC)
Fascinating way to write a poem--I don't think I've ever seen one done quite like this. Groovy. :)
alycewilson
Aug. 8th, 2013 08:15 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I like being called groovy.
witches
Aug. 8th, 2013 07:14 pm (UTC)
This is a really interesting way to write a poem, ia!
alycewilson
Aug. 8th, 2013 08:04 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I like to come up with weird stuff to challenge myself sometimes. 8^)
cheshire23
Aug. 11th, 2013 05:40 am (UTC)
I like the double meaning in the title - "complex" as in not-simple or "complex" as in "you're giving me a complex!" :)
alycewilson
Aug. 12th, 2013 10:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you! That's exactly what I was going for. I'm a big fan of double meanings. :)
agirlnamedluna
Aug. 11th, 2013 09:32 am (UTC)
Being unfamiliar with anime, it is (besides the very obvious titles) sort of hard to see what the references are, but it remains a comprehensible story :)
alycewilson
Aug. 12th, 2013 10:27 pm (UTC)
I'm actually also unfamiliar with most of these series, except for the names. I was simply using their evocative titles for their associations.
halfshellvenus
Aug. 12th, 2013 05:22 am (UTC)
This is an interesting poem-- so much imagery and under-meaning that it is the opposite of what I would expect from the method used to create/structure it.

Dynasty warriors,
wolf children, they played death billiards.

This line was my favorite.

Your point came through well, the feeling of lost innocence and regret is very clear.
alycewilson
Aug. 12th, 2013 10:28 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I was quite proud of that phrase, as well. I like throwing a little nonsensical language into poems at time to shake the reader out of the expected and take leaps of comprehension.
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