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This is my entry for this week of LJ Idol, Season 9. Please check out the entries of my fellow competitors and consider joining the therealljidol community. This week's topic was "Nobody can ride your back if your back's not bent." This will also serve as my NaPoWriMo poem for today.

Morning Trees
Morning sun shines through green-leafed trees

Sun Salutation

As I stretch hands to sun, I hear
the nagging buzz of "need to do." I round
my spine, to touch my feet. Folded
in two. An article due, a blog post,
potty training. I breathe, extend
one leg behind. Then another.
Oh, to walk away from the buzz,
like that woman in Portlandia,
at once relieved and ghostly.

I hold my body firm and straight,
plank position. Feel the strength
in my muscles; can hold myself like this
for minutes, hours. My cat brushes
my nose, tickles a smile. The weight
of burden begins to feel spread out,
bearable. Pop up my backside,
rise into an inverted V. Now, it all

rolls off, spilling to carpet. I move forward
one foot, then another. Let
my head hang, shoulders slack.
Present in my body. A present for
my body. Together, spine and muscle
unroll to lift head and hands once more
towards the sun. Buzz becomes
muted, background to the hum
of blood, heart and nerve. I press
my palms together, bring them to
my breastbone. Prayer position.
Hum. Om.

Many thanks to kianna_leigh and spydielives for the beta read!

ETA: KFP's Home Game entry is up, "Luke and the Scary Dogs." He wants me to turn it into a book for him!

Also, if you would like to see pictures and read a description of the positions in the Sun Salutation sequence, you can find it at this About.com article.

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Apr. 6th, 2014 09:53 pm (UTC)
I really love the poem and even managed to understand it as well. :P
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:08 am (UTC)
Good! My goal was to write a poem that would be accessible to readers.
Apr. 6th, 2014 10:02 pm (UTC)
This was a creative take on the topic! :)
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:08 am (UTC)
Thank you! I had to do some free writing before I even knew which direction to take this time.
Apr. 6th, 2014 10:54 pm (UTC)
So you do yoga? I've often wanted to try it. This is a very creative take on the prompt :) You are someone I truly admire, for so many reasons.
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:10 am (UTC)
I do! Since Christmas 2012 I've been doing a 15-minute daily workout from Gaiam which I received as a Christmas present. While I don't do it every day, I've found it really centers me on the days I do. And thanks for the compliment. I admire you, as well.
Apr. 7th, 2014 01:53 am (UTC)
This had such a lovely rhythm, and I love the line about potty training! Present/present also a great juxtaposition. Nice job :)
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:12 am (UTC)
Thank you! Potty training is just where I am right now, and it does end up being pretty stressful. It means a lot to hear positive remarks from you about my poetry, since I love your poems.
Apr. 7th, 2014 02:49 am (UTC)
This has such a peaceful feel to it where you're really in tune with your center and who you are at the moment.
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:12 am (UTC)
That was what I was aiming for. I'm glad it worked for you.
Apr. 7th, 2014 04:23 am (UTC)
lovely imagery, good flow, love it. :)
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:13 am (UTC)
Thank you! It's a very fluid yoga movement, so I'm glad I was able to capture that.
Apr. 7th, 2014 04:54 am (UTC)
This is lovely and relaxing. :)
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:13 am (UTC)
Thanks! I was hoping it might be.
Apr. 7th, 2014 05:25 am (UTC)
I can imagine a cat "helping" with yoga. I've had cats that would hop on my back if I bent over to get something from a bottom cabinet. :)
Apr. 7th, 2014 06:15 am (UTC)
Yes, Luke is my yoga partner. He runs underneath when I do "Downward Facing Dog," just to keep me on my toes. :)
Apr. 7th, 2014 01:28 pm (UTC)
Ah! I liked this one for it's uniqueness...OM Shanti to you!..:)
Apr. 7th, 2014 11:46 pm (UTC)
Namaste. :)
Apr. 7th, 2014 02:36 pm (UTC)
Lovely poem, love the beautiful sense/physicality of the descriptions.
Apr. 7th, 2014 11:47 pm (UTC)
Thank you! That was one of the things I hoped to achieve.
Apr. 7th, 2014 11:01 pm (UTC)
This was nice, a celebration of your body's abilities, with a bit of fun too. "can hold myself like this
for minutes, hours. My cat brushes
my nose, tickles a smile." Drat those cats! *grin*

Apr. 7th, 2014 11:47 pm (UTC)
He is my yoga partner. On days I don't do yoga, he follows me around, mewing, as if to say, "Did you forget something?"
Apr. 7th, 2014 11:33 pm (UTC)
Love the choice of picture complimenting the words!!
Apr. 7th, 2014 11:44 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I took that while taking an early morning walk on our family vacation this summer. That walk felt the same to me as doing yoga does, and especially discovering that fantastic grove, which any other time of day just looked ordinary.
Apr. 8th, 2014 12:56 am (UTC)
This kinda makes me want to try yoga...I could use some relaxation in my life. :)
Apr. 8th, 2014 01:05 am (UTC)
You should! Just remember, you don't have to do a long session. I do a 15-minute DVD most mornings, and it's amazing the impact it makes. I also have a Yoga for Kids DVD that I do with my son, which can even calm him down!
Apr. 8th, 2014 01:29 am (UTC)
Oh, I loved this. The words and rhythm worked very well.
Apr. 8th, 2014 02:02 am (UTC)
Oh, love this. It makes me want to run off and do yoga right this minute!
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