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LJI 11 Week 1: Mind/Trip

This is my entry for Week 1 of LJ Idol (therealljidol), Season 11. The topic this week is "Resolution."







tilted

A tilted view of a lake and a wooden bridge, as if the photographer is falling down

Mind/Trip


Who reads a story's ending
first? Abhorrent practice. To leap
past process into knowing. Yet,

how often I wish to fast-
forward through life's
bruises. To reach a point
where I'm knitted together. Healed. Perhaps
stronger. Nearly

a year since a bicep tear
turned my right arm inky blue,
my strength burgeons. Shoulder
twinges still burr my sleep. (An orthopedic
pillow helps.) So unfair, then, how --
in sweaty August -- uneven
pavement twisted
my knee with a pop,
the moment I lifted my eyes from
my path to watch my son
open a gate. By now,
I should have learned. Lately,

when I hurt myself, I have my eyes
on him. My consciousness flies
from my body, a protective cushion
around his movement. Bouncy
and incautious, he sails
over obstacles, living
in the present.

                     - September 26, 2019

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kittenboo
Sep. 27th, 2019 12:30 am (UTC)
This is really beautifully written.
alycewilson
Sep. 27th, 2019 07:27 am (UTC)
Thank you very much!
adoptedwriter
Sep. 27th, 2019 01:09 am (UTC)
So true. We do anything for our kids.
alycewilson
Sep. 27th, 2019 07:28 am (UTC)
And now, for you, your grandchild! (Soon to be grandchildren, right?) I have to remind myself that, at 9, he's a lot more capable, and it's OK to focus more on myself again.
kehlen
Sep. 27th, 2019 07:17 am (UTC)
Beautiful.
alycewilson
Sep. 27th, 2019 07:26 am (UTC)
Thank you so much!
i_love_freddie
Sep. 27th, 2019 08:42 am (UTC)
Lovely piece.
alycewilson
Sep. 27th, 2019 11:29 am (UTC)
Thank you!
nikkiii_brown
Sep. 27th, 2019 06:37 pm (UTC)
This was exceptional. Really drew me in. Your style is very unique. I loved it.
alycewilson
Oct. 1st, 2019 10:09 am (UTC)
Thank you very much! I'm glad to hear it.
bleodswean
Sep. 27th, 2019 08:12 pm (UTC)

Yes! Absolutely yes! I remember those years putting myself second third fourth out of protective love. This is real!

alycewilson
Oct. 1st, 2019 10:11 am (UTC)
Definitely! I once had a bachelor friend ask me why I have such a heavy-duty case for my phone. I told him if it was a choice between catching my boy and catching my phone, the boy will always win. I just didn't know how much that would apply to my person, as well!
static_abyss
Sep. 27th, 2019 10:29 pm (UTC)
I love your poem and how you used the photo to highlight the fall. Besutifully descriptive throughout. Well done ♡
uselesstinrelic
Sep. 29th, 2019 01:56 am (UTC)
Well written, as usual c:
ellison
Sep. 29th, 2019 10:52 am (UTC)
I like this a lot, it's so easy to keep watching over them always, as we always have, even to the point of our own detriment. And of course they're fine, and just living their lives. I liked this a lot! (My son is 8, so I completely get it!) I'm sorry you're hurt, and I hope you heal well and quickly!
sweeny_todd
Sep. 29th, 2019 11:00 am (UTC)
oh my goodness. I can feel the split focus. (also, I often start a book, then get a few chapters in, then read the end so I don't have to stress out about who the murderer is)
roina_arwen
Sep. 29th, 2019 07:27 pm (UTC)
Sweetly told. How’s the arm doing?
murielle
Sep. 29th, 2019 09:26 pm (UTC)
"To reach a point
where I'm knitted together. Healed. Perhaps
stronger."

Ah, if only!

"Lately,

when I hurt myself, I have my eyes
on him. My consciousness flies
from my body, a protective cushion
around his movement. Bouncy
and incautious, he sails
over obstacles, living
in the present."

The perfect instinct of the mother!

Beautiful!


marlawentmad
Sep. 29th, 2019 11:07 pm (UTC)

I want more poetry forever.

picosgemeos
Sep. 30th, 2019 01:51 am (UTC)
Love this. Reminded me of a friend in high school who had to read the last page before starting a book - never met anyone again like her!
me_sonrei
Sep. 30th, 2019 04:05 am (UTC)
This is really, really well done, and so relatable. Thank you for sharing!
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